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Love the turn at the end, the last paragraph is pure gold. It's quite windy by me today, you got me thinking I'm apt to float away out there

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rocks in pockets my friend

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This is wonderful, especially that last line. Really captures a nostalgic feeling for me.

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capturing feelings? Amazing. Thank you.

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What a wonderful, magical tale! Cheeky, so fey and tapped in to the unseen. Her sibling not believing, of course, and yet a little belief creeps in maybe. With the love.

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Thank you Liz! It was an idea that suddenly had a life of its own right away. Pleased you liked it.

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Oof, that turned didn't it! Great work, Jon.

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thank you Hana!

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I really liked this one, Jon. It gripped me right from the beginning. The innocence of the sister is juxtaposed beautifully with the protectiveness of the brother.

Bravo :)

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Thank you Michael. Appreciate you reading. I liked it too.

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Lovely. And I agree with other commenters - the last line is so good.

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Damn dude, this is great.

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Jun 26·edited Jun 26Author

Had to cleanse my pallete after all that sinning last week

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But now you'll need to sin again. The cycle must continue.

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Aw, beautifully done, Jon T! Thank you for writing this!🩶

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A thing about lightness and heavyness and now I'm not sure which team I'm on any more - to rock your rocks or to float away in the breeze?

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what's that thing? Float like a flutter-bye and rock like a B ?

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I was firmly of the lighter-than-air persuasion but now your cute charming Cheeky has kinda sorta started making me think that maybe floating away like a feather isn't absolutely the best thing? Damn her adorable hide...

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