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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

What genre is this? Because I think it might be my favorite and I need to know how to find more stories like yours. Or better, just keep writing them so I have more to read! I loved this so much.

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Jon T's avatar

I will keep em coming. Thank you for reading. It makes me skip around a little when I walk.

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L.L. Ford's avatar

You already know I love absurdist/surreal stories, Jon, but this was a master class.

Beautiful done as always!

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Jon T's avatar

Oh thank you so much. I’m really happy you enjoyed it.

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Will Boucher's avatar

One of the most refreshing pieces I've read in a while. i felt literal shock when he handed over the PJs.

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Jon T's avatar

Me too. I didnt see it coming until it was right in front of me. Thank you Will

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Bill Hiatt's avatar

This has to be one of the most creative piece I've seen in a long time.

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Jon T's avatar

Wow. Thank you Bill. It was fun to start writing it and figure out where it was going to go. Thank you very much for commenting and reading!

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Michael Edward's avatar

Such a strange and interesting story, Jon. Loved it :)

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Jon T's avatar

Thank you for reading and commenting Michael. Appreciate your mindballs on the work.

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EJ Trask's avatar

Wow. Such a beautiful, strange story. The way you wrote their unspoken dialogue was so exquisite. The smells, the sounds and the feltyness of the whole thing. Incredible piece.

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Jon T's avatar

Thank you EJ. I am so pleased you liked it.

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Edith Bow's avatar

I must add, I came home from a day dealing with bureaucracy and red tape to find this swirling on my feed. I listened to the audio so, my fiance could hear (a writer editor a person who studies writing theory, prose), I on the other hand, I'm in discovery like a slow burn. When I listened and read it, a film projected in my mind, 35 mm you know those theaters are scarce these days. The scene played and died with me, but in the end I felt inspired. It was quite lovely.

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Jon T's avatar

Happy this thing swirled in your direction. I love it when stories project like this. Flickering across synaptic gaps and lurching to life like a wind up monster. I am humbly flattered by your reactions. Thank you.

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Chris J. Franklin's avatar

That was really fantastic! And it's such a great setting with all those huge, strangely hypnotic machines, too, which makes the last line, "Sleep well", all the more mysterious and intriguing. Very nicely done... 😎

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Jon T's avatar

Thank you Chris. I love laundromats. You’re right, they are mysterious places

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Garen Marie's avatar

Listening to this was a treat. A weird, wonderful treat. The humor and pathos and just a little foreboding worked so well.

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Jon T's avatar

Ooh thank you. If i achieved pathos and humor, youve made my day.

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Liz Zimmers's avatar

This is wonderful! I've done my time (interminable boredom and weird anxiety) in laundromats without anything this magical happening. And now it has!

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Jon T's avatar

Thank you Liz. Next time check the traps.

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