Part 1
That opening paragraph is a hell of a hook. Looking forward to part 2
Thank you Will. Number 2 coming up.
Loving the vague tension and rhythm.
I second what Will said, the opening paragraph and even the few paragraphs after were very gripping. The unfolding tale also had me enthralled.
Really wonderful writing.
Thank you Michael - appreciate you reading.
This isn't a big thing, but you described Dez as they but didn't explain why.
What's the in-universe reason for it? You did describe jujee as her and other people as he.
What about Dez is different?
That opening paragraph is a hell of a hook. Looking forward to part 2
Thank you Will. Number 2 coming up.
Loving the vague tension and rhythm.
I second what Will said, the opening paragraph and even the few paragraphs after were very gripping. The unfolding tale also had me enthralled.
Really wonderful writing.
Thank you Michael - appreciate you reading.
This isn't a big thing, but you described Dez as they but didn't explain why.
What's the in-universe reason for it? You did describe jujee as her and other people as he.
What about Dez is different?