This has my mind zooming! Immediately I notice many connections to my section of the story, but I appreciate how it feels more grounded in reality. This is the character who truly lives in the building, who knows the other residents. Mine is isolated, confused, and in a more dreamlike state (the fog, the fleshy walls). Yours is penetrated by glass/porcelain. Mine is penetrated by rusty metal. Perhaps the title of our story should reflect the glass/steel connection? Just a thought. Also, this seems to be first part of the story, with the section I wrote coming directly after. I say this because of how you described the state of the bathroom in your story. What do you think? Either way, I'll begin my second contribution to the story today. Hope to have something for you soon.
This has my mind zooming! Immediately I notice many connections to my section of the story, but I appreciate how it feels more grounded in reality. This is the character who truly lives in the building, who knows the other residents. Mine is isolated, confused, and in a more dreamlike state (the fog, the fleshy walls). Yours is penetrated by glass/porcelain. Mine is penetrated by rusty metal. Perhaps the title of our story should reflect the glass/steel connection? Just a thought. Also, this seems to be first part of the story, with the section I wrote coming directly after. I say this because of how you described the state of the bathroom in your story. What do you think? Either way, I'll begin my second contribution to the story today. Hope to have something for you soon.